i wrote a poem...

well considering i wrote it at midnight, and for my girlfriend, its pretty good... i practically had her fucking me with her mind when she read it lol

im going to write more while she is gone these next 10 days though... lol deeper ones, longer ones... ya lol

blessthefates!

Archangel Azrael wrote: well considering i wrote it at midnight, and for my girlfriend, its pretty good... i practically had her fucking me with her mind when she read it lol

im going to write more while she is gone these next 10 days though... lol deeper ones, longer ones... ya lol

Yeah, because that’s as good as her actually fucking you right?

Feet hanging out the window, jock my shoe game/// Cause all my kicks fly, like Liu Kang///
Lil Wayne - First Place Winner

you say something johnny boy?

blessthefates!

I made a fuckin emo poem!!!:

I am bored with love
and it’s passionless limbs
that drape over my bed
in a lethargic state of impotence
while wearing the same red heart
my soul picked up hitchhiking
off highway serendipity

Now here we iz
alone in togetherness
trying to build dreams
with two by fours and glue,
but even a home
won’t tie us together
when our hearts live alone

Poetic vows cliched
into nothingness
like all words do, eventually
and we allowed
our bodies to become
another pair of hollow shadows
that make love to a wall
instead of each other
and we wonder why
the roses are dying

How emo is this?

Archangel Azrael wrote: you say something johnny boy?

No, typed something.

Feet hanging out the window, jock my shoe game/// Cause all my kicks fly, like Liu Kang///
Lil Wayne - First Place Winner

read my poem plz

Moose E.B. wrote:

Archangel Azrael wrote: it wouldnt fit with the rest of the poem.

make every line of the poem a few words longer, describe and egzagarate words, and it will look & sound better.

right now it sound borin.......imean theres nothin to it.

keep addin to it

i actually thouroughly enjoyed it....

J peth wrote:

Moose E.B. wrote:

Archangel Azrael wrote: it wouldnt fit with the rest of the poem.

make every line of the poem a few words longer, describe and egzagarate words, and it will look & sound better.

right now it sound borin.......imean theres nothin to it.

keep addin to it

i actually thouroughly enjoyed it....

thats because, you actually understand poetry... these guys are just thinking its a rap or some shit lol

blessthefates!

Archangel Azrael wrote:

J peth wrote:

Moose E.B. wrote:

Archangel Azrael wrote: it wouldnt fit with the rest of the poem.

make every line of the poem a few words longer, describe and egzagarate words, and it will look & sound better.

right now it sound borin.......imean theres nothin to it.

keep addin to it

i actually thouroughly enjoyed it....

thats because, you actually understand poetry... these guys are just thinking its a rap or some shit lol

read my poem plz

Archangel Azrael wrote:

J peth wrote:

Moose E.B. wrote:

Archangel Azrael wrote: it wouldnt fit with the rest of the poem.

make every line of the poem a few words longer, describe and egzagarate words, and it will look & sound better.

right now it sound borin.......imean theres nothin to it.

keep addin to it

i actually thouroughly enjoyed it....

thats because, you actually understand poetry... these guys are just thinking its a rap or some shit lol

and me and you are kinda in the same bout at this point in time....haha

every time i read i must say.... bravo!
as you are above me in this matter.... as when i use poetry... it’s by accident...

if guardian didn’t point it out...i would never notice...haha

READ MY FUCKIN POEM!4j1k4b’fvg


THe'
/hq4h

Archangel Azrael wrote:

J peth wrote:

Moose E.B. wrote:

Archangel Azrael wrote: it wouldnt fit with the rest of the poem.

make every line of the poem a few words longer, describe and egzagarate words, and it will look & sound better.

right now it sound borin.......imean theres nothin to it.

keep addin to it

i actually thouroughly enjoyed it....

thats because, you actually understand poetry... these guys are just thinking its a rap or some shit lol

NO it’s just horrible poetry.

Feet hanging out the window, jock my shoe game/// Cause all my kicks fly, like Liu Kang///
Lil Wayne - First Place Winner

J peth wrote:

Archangel Azrael wrote:

J peth wrote:

Moose E.B. wrote:

Archangel Azrael wrote: it wouldnt fit with the rest of the poem.

make every line of the poem a few words longer, describe and egzagarate words, and it will look & sound better.

right now it sound borin.......imean theres nothin to it.

keep addin to it

i actually thouroughly enjoyed it....

thats because, you actually understand poetry... these guys are just thinking its a rap or some shit lol

and me and you are kinda in the same bout at this point in time....haha

every time i read i must say.... bravo!
as you are above me in this matter.... as when i use poetry... it’s by accident...

if guardian didn’t point it out...i would never notice...haha

lol but im a litterature buff, os i have a reason to be above you on it lol.. i sit and write poetry and songs and short stories when im bored...

although after last years emotional breakdown when this bitch laughed in my face and ripped my heart asunder because i asked her to homecoming through a poem, i gave up on it... until i started going out with my girlfriend that is
shes awesome

blessthefates!

Archangel Azrael wrote:

J peth wrote:

Archangel Azrael wrote:

J peth wrote:

Moose E.B. wrote:

Archangel Azrael wrote: it wouldnt fit with the rest of the poem.

make every line of the poem a few words longer, describe and egzagarate words, and it will look & sound better.

right now it sound borin.......imean theres nothin to it.

keep addin to it

i actually thouroughly enjoyed it....

thats because, you actually understand poetry... these guys are just thinking its a rap or some shit lol

and me and you are kinda in the same bout at this point in time....haha

every time i read i must say.... bravo!
as you are above me in this matter.... as when i use poetry... it’s by accident...

if guardian didn’t point it out...i would never notice...haha

lol but im a litterature buff, os i have a reason to be above you on it lol.. i sit and write poetry and songs and short stories when im bored...

although after last years emotional breakdown when this bitch laughed in my face and ripped my heart asunder because i asked her to homecoming through a poem, i gave up on it... until i started going out with my girlfriend that is
shes awesome

i understand the heart break...it kinda held me in a rut for a bit...and that is why i didn’t come on here for almost 3 weeks.....then i went to arkansas and all healed...but now i have guardian and she’s cool...but to timid to know it...

haha but the minor poetic feats i pull off is probably due to my enjoying to read japanese litterature and study history...

lol... only problem with my girlfriend (not really a problem for me, but might be for other virgins) is that she isnt a virgin.. she says it has led away a ton of guys from her lol... i simply said, the past is the past, all i worry about is now and later

then she wanted to know if i wanted to know anything about her personal life, and that she would answer in all honesty, and i simply said her past was her business and that if she had anything she felt she needed to tell me it would come up eventually
im good with words most of the time, being a writer and all

blessthefates!

Read mah poem plz.

It was nice.

Red_Calibur9 wrote: It was nice.

ty, it is emo though.

King John wrote:

Archangel Azrael wrote:

J peth wrote:

Moose E.B. wrote:

Archangel Azrael wrote: it wouldnt fit with the rest of the poem.

make every line of the poem a few words longer, describe and egzagarate words, and it will look & sound better.

right now it sound borin.......imean theres nothin to it.

keep addin to it

i actually thouroughly enjoyed it....

thats because, you actually understand poetry... these guys are just thinking its a rap or some shit lol

NO it’s just horrible poetry.

.....for shame bitch your girl friend is a slut

Archangel Azrael wrote:

J peth wrote:

Moose E.B. wrote:

Archangel Azrael wrote: it wouldnt fit with the rest of the poem.

make every line of the poem a few words longer, describe and egzagarate words, and it will look & sound better.

right now it sound borin.......imean theres nothin to it.

keep addin to it

i actually thouroughly enjoyed it....

thats because, you actually understand poetry... these guys are just thinking its a rap or some shit lol

wo wo wo!

rap is poetry.... end of.

and u say we dont understand poetry?????? ARE U MAD!

u really think shakespeare or some other poet would think that was thouroughly enjoyable.....i doubt it son.

WOT U WROTE WAS NOT POETRY, IT WAS A FEW LINES THAT RHYMED......THATS IT.

i wo tryin to give ya some advise to make it better, but wateva bruh.... ya’meen.

Moose E.B. AKA CartOOn Villain