wrote a new song..

Archangel Azrael wrote: big words:
Contemplated
Flummoxed
— — — — — —
depth:

- look in the second stanza
there is a hidden 666 in there
showing that i am facing hell

-Light shines down from hell above
showing that at this moment in time
when i see her face
i face a fate worse than hell


— — — -
situation:

loving a girl...
come on you pimp bastard
how many girls have you honestly known that you would do anything for.

— — — —
feelings:

Loving a girl that broke your heart
feeling misery from all that would usually make you happy
and visa versa
as well as feeling heartbreak by all that you love...





seriously
did you actually read it?

Thos words are not complex or big at all.Atleast for me.And yes I did read it.Just I saw much deeper,complex,full of feelings songs.If you want to stand out.You must not limit yourself to the options at hand.

i really dont see why i try with you guys
you guys are hiphop/rap douchers and this is more an alternative, rock or indy song

blessthefates!

Archangel Azrael wrote: big words:

Contemplated
Flummoxed
— — — — — —
depth:

- look in the second stanza
there is a hidden 666 in there
showing that i am facing hell

-Light shines down from hell above
showing that at this moment in time
when i see her face
i face a fate worse than hell


— — — -
situation:

loving a girl...
come on you pimp bastard
how many girls have you honestly known that you would do anything for.

— — — —
feelings:

Loving a girl that broke your heart
feeling misery from all that would usually make you happy
and visa versa
as well as feeling heartbreak by all that you love...





seriously
did you actually read it?

More or less I felt it was like I went through 8 weeks ago, accept there would be some happy verse after all that now Something far greater than I ever thought possible.

And before King John gets his panties in a bunch about what I just said: It’s cool you don’t share my thought level of women, that’s all good. You might have had more women than me in a month than I have in my whole like. But I have quality, not quantity, which I would have it no other way.


Azreal: Good song because I have gone through hell and I came back and went to paradise in many ways. I felt the emotion in the song for sure.

Archangel Azrael wrote: big words:

Contemplated
Flummoxed
— — — — — —
depth:

- look in the second stanza
there is a hidden 666 in there
showing that i am facing hell

-Light shines down from hell above
showing that at this moment in time
when i see her face
i face a fate worse than hell


— — — -
situation:

loving a girl...
come on you pimp bastard
how many girls have you honestly known that you would do anything for.

— — — —
feelings:

Loving a girl that broke your heart
feeling misery from all that would usually make you happy
and visa versa
as well as feeling heartbreak by all that you love...





seriously
did you actually read it?

Once again, only my opinion don’t get pissy. Contemplated and Flummoxed aren’t really big words, I guess there a step above average vocabulary but I wouldn’t consider them big.I was going to mention this in my other post, but I’ll do it here, why would Hell shine DOWN? I understood the situation was that that one chick broke your heart, I’m just saying it’s nothing that I wouldn’t expect any aspiring High School song writer to write.

Feet hanging out the window, jock my shoe game/// Cause all my kicks fly, like Liu Kang///
Lil Wayne - First Place Winner

thank you chibi lol

blessthefates!

Archangel Azrael wrote: i really dont see why i try with you guys
you guys are hiphop/rap douchers and this is more an alternative, rock or indy song

See that right there, don’t take negative criticism so personally, take it and use it to better your future work, if you feel that every single song or poem you write is infallible, then why do you ask for people’s opinion in the first place?

Feet hanging out the window, jock my shoe game/// Cause all my kicks fly, like Liu Kang///
Lil Wayne - First Place Winner

King John wrote:

Archangel Azrael wrote: i really dont see why i try with you guys
you guys are hiphop/rap douchers and this is more an alternative, rock or indy song

See that right there, don’t take negative criticism so personally, take it and use it to better your future work, if you feel that every single song or poem you write is infallible, then why do you ask for people’s opinion in the first place?

Well why wouldn’t he take it personally....He obviously put his heart in to the song...

Count Bleck wrote:

King John wrote:

Archangel Azrael wrote: i really dont see why i try with you guys
you guys are hiphop/rap douchers and this is more an alternative, rock or indy song

See that right there, don’t take negative criticism so personally, take it and use it to better your future work, if you feel that every single song or poem you write is infallible, then why do you ask for people’s opinion in the first place?

Well why wouldn’t he take it personally....He obviously put his heart in to the song...

Because nobody was making a personal attack on him, it’s just a criticism of his work, if somebody says the don’t like one of my songs and gives me a reason why and a way to make it better I always take it into account, the only time I would get mad is if somebody says IT SUCKS with no reason given(which I didn’t do)

Feet hanging out the window, jock my shoe game/// Cause all my kicks fly, like Liu Kang///
Lil Wayne - First Place Winner

Yea but if the song is bad.It´s not my fault.He/she must improve.There are people like: thos who have talent right away/thos who have talent,but must train how to use it/thos who have no talent and will never make a good song.

King John wrote:

Count Bleck wrote:

King John wrote:

Archangel Azrael wrote: i really dont see why i try with you guys
you guys are hiphop/rap douchers and this is more an alternative, rock or indy song

See that right there, don’t take negative criticism so personally, take it and use it to better your future work, if you feel that every single song or poem you write is infallible, then why do you ask for people’s opinion in the first place?

Well why wouldn’t he take it personally....He obviously put his heart in to the song...

Because nobody was making a personal attack on him, it’s just a criticism of his work, if somebody says the don’t like one of my songs and gives me a reason why and a way to make it better I always take it into account, the only time I would get mad is if somebody says IT SUCKS with no reason given(which I didn’t do)

I realize it wasn’t directly intended, but as I said since he put his heart in to the song, it probably does feel like a personal attack. Honestly, you have to have been in a situation like that to understand the full value you know? I mean sure there is lots of people who DO put their emotions in to their songs you are right, but as I said, it’s something you have to experience. I suppose you could pull an Axl Rose on me and be like “Stop complaining about how life sucks, people go through that all the time." type deals. Still though.

Count Bleck wrote:

King John wrote:

Count Bleck wrote:

King John wrote:

Archangel Azrael wrote: i really dont see why i try with you guys
you guys are hiphop/rap douchers and this is more an alternative, rock or indy song

See that right there, don’t take negative criticism so personally, take it and use it to better your future work, if you feel that every single song or poem you write is infallible, then why do you ask for people’s opinion in the first place?

Well why wouldn’t he take it personally....He obviously put his heart in to the song...

Because nobody was making a personal attack on him, it’s just a criticism of his work, if somebody says the don’t like one of my songs and gives me a reason why and a way to make it better I always take it into account, the only time I would get mad is if somebody says IT SUCKS with no reason given(which I didn’t do)

I realize it wasn’t directly intended, but as I said since he put his heart in to the song, it probably does feel like a personal attack. Honestly, you have to have been in a situation like that to understand the full value you know? I mean sure there is lots of people who DO put their emotions in to their songs you are right, but as I said, it’s something you have to experience. I suppose you could pull an Axl Rose on me and be like “Stop complaining about how life sucks, people go through that all the time." type deals. Still though.

It has nothing to do with the situation, there are some great song about people having there hearts broken, I just didn’t feel this particular one is one of them, and if you’re going to be a song writer you can’t take every negative criticism to heart or you’ll never amount to anything.

Feet hanging out the window, jock my shoe game/// Cause all my kicks fly, like Liu Kang///
Lil Wayne - First Place Winner

RealTalker wrote: Yea but if the song is bad.It´s not my fault.He/she must improve.There are people like: thos who have talent right away/thos who have talent,but must train how to use it/thos who have no talent and will never make a good song.

Yes but conflict of liking different styles does influence your opinion on if the person has talent or not. For instance, I think ICP sucks ass, but there is plenty of Juggalos out there who like that music even though I believe ICP has no talent. It’s all a matter of taste and it changes from person to person.

King John wrote:

Archangel Azrael wrote: i really dont see why i try with you guys
you guys are hiphop/rap douchers and this is more an alternative, rock or indy song

See that right there, don’t take negative criticism so personally, take it and use it to better your future work, if you feel that every single song or poem you write is infallible, then why do you ask for people’s opinion in the first place?

lol
did i ask for an opinion here?
dont think so
just posted the song.

blessthefates!

Archangel Azrael wrote:

King John wrote:

Archangel Azrael wrote: i really dont see why i try with you guys
you guys are hiphop/rap douchers and this is more an alternative, rock or indy song

See that right there, don’t take negative criticism so personally, take it and use it to better your future work, if you feel that every single song or poem you write is infallible, then why do you ask for people’s opinion in the first place?

lol
did i ask for an opinion here?
dont think so
just posted the song.

Why else would you post a song and then bump the topic unless you wanted people’s opinion?

FYI, this is in the wrong section.

Feet hanging out the window, jock my shoe game/// Cause all my kicks fly, like Liu Kang///
Lil Wayne - First Place Winner

no
i wanted people to read it
and not really
this is arts and CREATIVITY
writing is a creative art...

blessthefates!

Music is also considered an art.

and id rather keep it away from your power johnny

blessthefates!

Count Bleck wrote: Music is also considered an art.

That’s true, but there is a section specifically for Music, which is where it should go.

Archangel Azrael wrote: no
i wanted people to read it
and not really
this is arts and CREATIVITY
writing is a creative art...

And after they read it you didn’t want to know what they thought of it?

Feet hanging out the window, jock my shoe game/// Cause all my kicks fly, like Liu Kang///
Lil Wayne - First Place Winner

i would have done with a simple
“hey”
or
“cool”
or even
“ladskgu”
or something like that..

blessthefates!

Archangel Azrael wrote: i would have done with a simple
“hey”
or
“cool”
or even
“ladskgu”
or something like that..

And I responded with , that’s pretty short, but the thing is you only wanted positive responses, but you’re not going to get any better at anything if people keep on telling you things that are average at best are great.

Feet hanging out the window, jock my shoe game/// Cause all my kicks fly, like Liu Kang///
Lil Wayne - First Place Winner