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oh harrow wrote:

El Hermosa Locura wrote:

maebara kun wrote: ok i cant rap soooo

If you can’t rap why the hell are you on a RAP forum? && is there really any point in saying “I can’t rap” when it doesn’t give him the feedback he needs? shut the hell up.

i thought it was funny.

Sorry dude, it was one of those days. :]

Its the prince mother fucker what you wanna do now i got the ak in my hand i put the 45 down beeen a under ground kiG as i thind its time under ground as the niggas in my hood known not to back down ima grind all the time catch me in the hood i was raised to get doe fuck hoe and smoke dro

im smokin on a blunt striaght posted on u haters/
u hate it but i love it cuz u focused on a player/
i aint worried bout the rumors man im focused on my paper/
if he really bout his beef imma go and get him later/

i dont really got the time to be goin through u haters/
but if u want it that bad imma serve u like a waiter/
take the cash and bounce get to steppin in my gators/
tip my hat get in the lac and imma see u niggas later/

dont come around here cuz i dont need ya,
dont come my way cuz i dont believe ya,
im fine all by myself i told you that before,
its just me i have to cover for,
i can take care of myself been doin it fo years,
i can remember sittin in my kitchen starvin with tears,
rollin down my face cuz i cant provide no food,
i didnt even wanna write this im not in tha mood,
to let this deep shit flow out of my blackened heart,
but its right here right now like kmart,
i got that blue light special 2 for one,
well theres my 2,500 its over and done,



man im as mad as a hatter,
dont even read this shit it just dont matter,
feal like lettin my fealing splatter to the pad,
this shits runnin thru my brain like a mad,
dash to the finish line but i can never handel mine,
just steady doin the same old shit like an assembaly line/
my lifes just to repetitive my thoughts are competitive,
with the way im fealin i cant go back to dealin,
hustlin till the sunrise tryna make a come up,

this shit sick

Hey Dude that was hott, but your rap has too many big words your croward would get bored
you gotta make it more funny
check this: i was walking down the street minding my own bizness when theses kids came up to me. they started pushing in the shoving in beatin on me..so i took out my gun shot one in the head i look on the floor the bitch still wanst dead


i got more but thats just an example

Hey Dude that was hott, but your rap has too many big words your croward would get bored
you gotta make it more funny
check this: i was walking down the street minding my own bizness when theses kids came up to me. they started pushing in the shoving in beatin on me and i thought that was really mean ..so i took out my gun shot one in the head i look on the floor the bitch still wanst dead


i got more but thats just an example

Hey Dude that was hott, but your rap has too many big words your croward would get bored
you gotta make it more funny
check this: i was walking down the street minding my own bizness when theses kids came up to me. they started pushing in the shoving in beatin on me and i thought that was really mean ..so i took out my gun shot one in the head i look on the floor the bitch still wanst dead


i got more but thats just an example

sup Everyone? I know I haven’t been on here in a while so..
Check out my New stuff.. And theres other new vids
too.. comment.. etc.. peace.

all yall nigas is on da same phase yall remind me of dAt MOVie skool daze. ya swag so lame yo shit is retired. u nigas steady tawkin while ma shit gets higher u lames ass fools wut u tawkin bot put ma money in ya face n make u shut ya mouth im playn yalllike a drumset yall dead so imma put ya ta rest cum holla at me wen u get reel rhymes wastin me naw u wastin ya own time fa me its easy ta make money money so sweet i call it ice cream n cake money im takin shitts on ya faces u get money by hand i get it by da cases yea ma rhymes is evil call me beyonce cuz i got a big ego n cant nobody drop me ill take u chick n we can be terrence n rocsi or we can be mariah n nick all of yall gurlfrends couldnt get off ma dick

Start at :11

check,
here comes the flavor,major league rhyma//
basically a guy who takes a leak right on the side of,//
your house,when your not home,or maybe when your there//
I don’t plan too much shit,can’t stand too much shit//
but the styles mad rare..seeing red like a flare//
or blood escaping your skin,yes it’s Vin on the air//
got the radio locked,got the television on//
you can tell a Vintage song from its elegance and all,that//
yes it be the strong-est...nah im just playin//
getting more votes than Con-gress...well im jus sayin//
looking fly in the ride,watch me enter the wagon//
sick...mad kicks..call me Enter the Dragon//
mothafuck a dance song,mothafuck your man’s song//
im comin up with other stuff you bustas never planned on//
yes i keep it straight,its the V-I-N-T//
dont give a fuck about your AGE, im a P-I-M-P//

Listen motha fucka, callate la boca, you think ur so bad, you need to go get a motha fuckin writtin pad, you better start taking notes here man, cus ima destroy you, everything around you im about to blow you cuz hommie this shit right here its my life, ima open this up like a switch blade knife… go eat this beat wack ass…
Now tell me what you think when you see me rappin, your rhymes are wack and mines are poppin, now im gonna kill you just like Jason or freddy, im coming at you I don’t care if your ready, cuz this crap here aint no game, ur fuckin style sounds, all the same, bitch u cant even keep a beat, ur flow is wack and mine is concrete.
Ima teach u some fuckin respect, u and ur crew are a bunch of rejects

AznSkillz wrote: sup Everyone? I know I haven’t been on here in a while so..
Check out my New stuff.. And theres other new vids
too.. comment.. etc.. peace.

wow.
best i hard from you

Suppose to go Record friday. It would be my first time with a serious attitude around people. I may have found my producer.

Vintage wrote:

Start at :11

check,
here comes the flavor,major league rhyma//
basically a guy who takes a leak right on the side of,//
your house,when your not home,or maybe when your there//
I don’t plan too much shit,can’t stand too much shit//
but the styles mad rare..seeing red like a flare//
or blood escaping your skin,yes it’s Vin on the air//
got the radio locked,got the television on//
you can tell a Vintage song from its elegance and all,that//
yes it be the strong-est...nah im just playin//
getting more votes than Con-gress...well im jus sayin//
looking fly in the ride,watch me enter the wagon//
sick...mad kicks..call me Enter the Dragon//
mothafuck a dance song,mothafuck your man’s song//
im comin up with other stuff you bustas never planned on//
yes i keep it straight,its the V-I-N-T//
dont give a fuck about your AGE, im a P-I-M-P//

iight, not ur best though...

Moose E.B. AKA CartOOn Villain

Modena wrote:

AznSkillz wrote: sup Everyone? I know I haven’t been on here in a while so..
Check out my New stuff.. And theres other new vids
too.. comment.. etc.. peace.

wow.
best i hard from you

the lyrics are fine bruh

u need to work on your delivery though, it might be cos youre readin it from a page i dunno, but still it sounds a lil off.

active critisism only works when the man slackin listens to em//

Moose E.B. AKA CartOOn Villain

[underline]im so fly[/underline]

youre fly like pigeons, when positioned over mics shittin & bridges come to mind//
ya get slinged down by lil kiddies who finish ya when begginin their rhyme//
fist punchin the sky, youve got all star printed ya 09 sneaks ya not fly ya high//
let the punters predict the winner, just project your lyrical glimmer in time//
fuck 9am, fuck this dimention, i dont think i mentioned im fly //
for what its worth fuck the earth this solar system isnt mine//[ZOOM!!]
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again i will say i will edit this though i know i wont

tell me what ya think plz

btw how do u underline stuff???

Moose E.B. AKA CartOOn Villain

haha Ive heard that before Moose, question is how do I change
my delivery? be more specific.

AznSkillz Nli wrote: haha Ive heard that before Moose, question is how do I change
my delivery? be more specific.

in my opinion the way you speed up and slow down is a little off. In some parts of the song it seems like you’re flow is all over the place.

Modena wrote:

AznSkillz Nli wrote: haha Ive heard that before Moose, question is how do I change
my delivery? be more specific.

in my opinion the way you speed up and slow down is a little off. In some parts of the song it seems like you’re flow is all over the place.

thats basically what i was gunna say.

supras the man.

Moose E.B. AKA CartOOn Villain

tha flow comes to me with such intensity/
throw me in the water, ill change tha density/
such a mystery, how i rhyme on tha beat/
yu niggas talk gangsta, but never pop heat/
i always got beef, but im hot as a grill/
go fetch a pail of water like jack and jill/
i think im gettn sick cause ma rhymes is ill/
this is life or death, nigga its time to kill/
call me mike jack, i give yu niggas cardiac/
yu be holdn on ya chest like yu had a heart attack/
im living in tha sky, thts where ma heart is at/
ill knock em out tha park, like a baseball bat/
swift as a cat, hard as a tree/
im floatn like a butterfly, stinging like a bee/
knockn down these rappers, im muhammed ali/
or call me joe frazier ckuz dem punches they will daze ya/
spotted on ya head is a bunch of red lazas/