rap

i like to rap but do it fo ten minutes
this is my first time but ive been in it
you dis me cuz im white
but i can put up a fight
ill spit twisted rymes that fuck wit ya head
you dont know what im doin cuz i put ya to bed
my ryhmes like hypnosis
whats that smell its atroucious
thats ya breath when ya spit
damn it smells like ya boyfriends dick
i never rap before but these rymes are sick
yea im a newbie
but suck my dick..

hehe my first time... did that suck?

No offense but that did suck... cock.
lol jk about the cock part

Weegee hates retarded bastards who don’t think.

you do have talent, but that wawsnt the best rap. you start off with good lines and then go to the mos obvious or simple rhymes. also, as a battler, you shouldnt mix. you have a freestyle that is a personal attack on your opponent and also you keep coming back to the fact that you havnt raped b4 and it is tryin 2 make you look good. stick to either how gr8 you are or pesonal attacks. dude this is constructive criticism, dont take offense, please but im hoping i can get a rapper on this god damned site who can give me a challenge. also, try not to use the same line rhyming words more then once. you said dick,sick,dick and it sounds terrible in a battle. we are typing on this site, so take the time to think about what you are typing. most battles on this site give you 12-18 hrs to rply so u have enough time to tear your opponent to shreds.
you should be able to figure the rest out. think about this stuf and post a rap in a week and see how you change.