Is this a good 1st page to a story that my english teacher might get published for me? BTW i’m in 9th grade. So here is goes:
There was a pleasant ocean breeze circulating through the island¡¯s usually rough weather patterns. The marine life was plentiful and thriving in an age where human waste flows through the waters like red dye diffusing in a glass of water. Scattered seashells lay on the shore lost in the sands of time. It is time, the very essence which controls nature and it¡¯s creations. As the sunset gently overflowed the vast blue sea, two dolphins gracefully jumped above the ocean. As one of the dolphins submerged back into the water, the other was viewing a seagull that passed by. At the corner of the seagull¡¯s eye was a mother snapping turtle laying her clutch of eggs on a small warm rock to keep them incubated. The temperature around here is usually about 70 to 85¢ª as it usually is here in the Caribbean. Because of these warm temperatures, the coral reef usually display their sophisticated colors near the rim of the shallow for spectators to admire their extravagant beauty. Swimming alongside these extraordinary sights are tropical fish blending their spectral colors in with the coral reef.
On the island exists humans native to the area, but intermixed with settlers from the western world. On the streets native reggae music shifted through the air as people from the village were buying fruits, fish, vegetables, and other valuable goods. In one of the huts, a boy was waxing his freshly carved bow and arrow.
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