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laface got me

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what do you mean by that?
???????????????????

Last edited 11 Jun 2006 11:10 am by Laface612

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at 5;00

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iight

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what do you mean lilclo234?

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if young bitch is here
ill battle him now

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forget him you want to battle right now
you go first

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you funna drop

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i go first

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yea

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drop!!!!!!!!!!

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for laface

U think you real and
so clean but trust me
all is mine
stop hatin on the
shit that other mcz
be tryna combine
so dont try to spit
i bet yo ass is tryna split
But thats ok cause nobody
here even really likes you
i dont wanna fight you
i just wanna tell you
wats up I think i speak
for everyone sayin
shut the fuck up
i cant stand listening
to your lame ass flow/
so learn how to spit
before u come back bro
u triying to rhyme
mothafucka but all u are
is a cocksucka
nigga ill leave
u hanging just like
i was banging
im tired of ya bullshit
already im sick of u
dont play jus suck a
dick or two
errbody knoes what
u like to do....
i murder pussy bitches
like serial killas
in mah house destroir
drive by nigga

Last edited 11 Jun 2006 02:42 pm by xBrucex

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to bruce

yea im fresh as hell dude
you is weak im sorry for bein so rude
dog you need to watch yo langunge and get a new additude
thats why when ever you go on stage you get booed off
your ass say you ghetto you probably rich and live in a loft
see now all these niggas on this site think im goin soft
im teaching you a lesson like my 6th grade teacher joeanne toft
you say you gettin tired of me well coo cuz imm be around for awhile
when i walk by yo girl all she do is smile
no i ain’t got a weak as flow
like yo mom billy joe
i saw her bangin 5 dudes last night yea shes a hoe
imma make my shoulder lean like im young dro
im be buyin me patron like im at a liqur sto
yea i won this battle bitch
i start dissin you and you go tell mommy like a snitch
iight imma hook you up wit martha stewrt like im hitch

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awt noww how we know who won

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get voters
like sumpereme

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i met u my vote

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for what battle

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i vote for bruce i aint got time to explain why i will later

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Bruce
opening: 3 decent first line
no punchlines= 0 (try adding something that’ll catch voters attention)
personal=1
“stop hatin on the shit that other mcz be tryna combine” (doesn’t make much sense tho)
wordplay=2 “cocksucka...suck a dick or two”
multiples=2 okay multiples nothing really sticks out
flow of bars=2 hard to read how your bars are suppose to flow (try using comma’s, to show your pauses)

my favorite bar: wats up I think i speak for everyone sayin shut the fuck up i cant stand listening to your lame ass flow/ so learn how to spit before u come back bro
Brucetotal= 10

LaFace
opening=1 kinda soft “sorry for being rude” could’ve been better
punchlines=2 “teach u a lesson...like ms. loft” weak but still a punchline no doubt. (use better wordplay, it’ll make that line hotter)
personals=2 “u say u ghetto...live in a loft”
wordplay=1 " teach lessons & Joeanna Toft”
multiples=1 (good try at using multi’s but try arranging them throughout your bars, not just on the end)
flow of bars=2 it seemed like you were doing alot of filling in rather than writing. (read from “imma make my shoulder lean..." and figure out who would care about the rest of it.

my favorite bar: your ass say you ghetto you probably rich and live in a loft see now all these niggas on this site think im goin soft im teaching you a lesson like my 6th grade teacher joeanne toft
LaFace total=9
my vote goes for xBrucex, read the notes and try applying them to your next battle.

Last edited 11 Jun 2006 04:22 pm by Supreme Chancellor

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and wordplay is the relationship between two or more words within a bar or two.

example: -GodzFavourite
“pull shit over bullshit like a matador”
Matadors are bull fighters, pull guns to kill all the nonsense.

this is an excellent example of multiples and wordplay from -lilclo234

I’m battling battles with data that will shatter marrow in bones
I’m shootin' arrows and crones; I sit with pharaohs in thrones
My arrogant poems and flow deflate the air in your domes
— >word play-(explainable within bar)Cause I fiend for microphones like a Heroin jones

I think you may be misplaced in the rankings look out for the new rankings chart. you definitely need to battle lilclo234, see you at the top.

Last edited 11 Jun 2006 04:31 pm by Supreme Chancellor