| 22 Jan 2007 03:01 pm |
Happy to help Rep: 31  Joined: 05 Jan 2007 Posts: 9,331 OFFLINE | Part (1) THE FINDINGS.
“Spread the word my son, time is here, time for you and me to take hold of the moment” Jason gript his fathers hand as hard as he could “NOW!" his father shouted “NOW MY SON JUMP!" his father leened foward pulling at Jason’s arm almost ripping it out of it’s socket Jason didnt have the stragth to pull back “NO!" Jason shouted “I CANT DO IT!" his little legs where shaking with fear “YOU MUST! WE DONT HAVE MUCH TIME IT MUST BE NOW!" his father replied, the wind seem to take the words away from Jason “I CANT HEAR YOU!" Jason shouted back, his hands sweating and slowly losing his grip on his father “COME WITH ME JASON!" “I CANT I’M SORRY FATHER I JUST CANT!" his fathers hand slowly let go of his.
Stepping foward his father looked back “Ok then i must do this on my own” he wispered “FATHER NO!" Jason screamed but it was to late his father had gone Jason turned to the railings on the side of the old iron bridge his hands so cold from the howling wind he could hardly get a good hold of the rusty rail but some how he managed to pull himself up and over the top bar now on the solid concrete Jason could reflect on what had just happend his father was dead.
Tears rolled down his face each one holding a memorie of his father “no be brave” he wispered to himself, wipping away the tears and his thoughts for his father he new he had things to do people to find and qustions to be ansawed.
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| 22 Jan 2007 04:39 pm |
The drummer Rep: 18 Joined: 20 Aug 2005 Posts: 14,615 OFFLINE | I am writing a book that will be about 347 pages long I would post the first chapter on here but I dont want people stealing it because it isent copyrighted yet.
It is called The Cat and the Mouse.
To give you an idea what it is about think about Halloween/When a stranger calls kind of setting.
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| 22 Jan 2007 08:01 pm |
The Dog-Mod! Rep: 54 Joined: 28 Dec 2006 Posts: 18,936 | GROOVY Aaron. should be Awesome!
'get off the phone, he’s calling from within the house..OMFG runnnnnn!!'
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| 22 Jan 2007 08:30 pm |
The drummer Rep: 18Joined: 20 Aug 2005 Posts: 14,615 OFFLINE | Ok I’ll tell you this the main character is named Linda Kroft and she just broke up with her boyfriend so she goes on a chat room and finds a nice dude named Brandon. She meets him and likes him very much but what she doesent know is that Brandon escaped from the institution for the mentally ill. And to make matters worse Brandon is Linda’s best friends' brother Justin. Brandon wants to kill Justin for calling the cops on his dad when he wittness him killing his mother. Now Linda must help Justin stay alive. Who is the Cat who is the mouse. Is Brandon the killer the preditor or the prey. Will Linda have to become a killer to protect Justin?
There that is a very...very short look at what it is about.
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| 22 Jan 2007 08:34 pm |
Damn you Thatcher, damn you tory bitch! Rep: 7 Joined: 28 Oct 2006 Posts: 5,458 OFFLINE | no1 rated my 2 chapters yet 
i mite sfter the other 3 chapters start su,mmin new called..... ah i wonnt tell yet
alrite!idk wat to do next k
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| 22 Jan 2007 08:41 pm |
The drummer Rep: 18Joined: 20 Aug 2005 Posts: 14,615 OFFLINE | I read it was pretty good
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| 22 Jan 2007 10:16 pm |
The Dog-Mod! Rep: 54Joined: 28 Dec 2006 Posts: 18,936 | will read and rate all peoples stories tonight. in around 6 hours or so
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| 23 Jan 2007 12:22 am |
The one and only OP Rep: 26 Joined: 28 May 2006 Posts: 9,100 OFFLINE | tuscan1 wrote:
Chapter (1) THE FINDINGS.
“Spread the word my son, time is here, time for you and me to take hold of the moment” Jason gript his fathers hand as hard as he could “NOW!" his father shouted “NOW MY SON JUMP!" his father leened foward pulling at Jason’s arm almost ripping it out of it’s socket Jason didnt have the stragth to pull back “NO!" Jason shouted “I CANT DO IT!" his little legs where shaking with fear “YOU MUST! WE DONT HAVE MUCH TIME IT MUST BE NOW!" his father replied, the wind seem to take the words away from Jason “I CANT HEAR YOU!" Jason shouted back, his hands sweating and slowly losing his grip on his father “COME WITH ME JASON!" “I CANT I’M SORRY FATHER I JUST CANT!" his fathers hand slowly let go of his.
Stepping foward his father looked back “Ok then i must do this on my own” he wispered “FATHER NO!" Jason screamed but it was to late his father had gone Jason turned to the railings on the side of the old iron bridge his hands so cold from the howling wind he could hardly get a good hold of the rusty rail but some how he managed to pull himself up and over the top bar now on the solid concrete Jason could reflect on what had just happend his father was dead.
Tears rolled down his face each one holding a memorie of his father “no be brave” he wispered to himself, wipping away the tears and his thoughts for his father he new he had things to do people to find and qustions to be ansawed.
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| 23 Jan 2007 12:23 am |
The one and only OP Rep: 26Joined: 28 May 2006 Posts: 9,100 OFFLINE | Aaron McKay wrote:
I am writing a book that will be about 347 pages long I would post the first chapter on here but I dont want people stealing it because it isent copyrighted yet.
It is called The Cat and the Mouse.
To give you an idea what it is about think about Halloween/When a stranger calls kind of setting.
You can write?
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| 23 Jan 2007 12:26 am |
The drummer Rep: 18Joined: 20 Aug 2005 Posts: 14,615 OFFLINE | Yes I write poetry and short stories songs music and I want to publish my stuff in about 5 years..
I’m trying to form a band too but no one can sing where I live and I need a really good lead guitar player.
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| 23 Jan 2007 12:34 am |
The one and only OP Rep: 26Joined: 28 May 2006 Posts: 9,100 OFFLINE | Nice, you should post your stuff on your myspace blogs and set them to friends only.
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| 23 Jan 2007 12:41 am |
Damn you Thatcher, damn you tory bitch! Rep: 7Joined: 28 Oct 2006 Posts: 5,458 OFFLINE | i can sing but ive got a vboice like a girl
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| 23 Jan 2007 12:46 am |
The one and only OP Rep: 26Joined: 28 May 2006 Posts: 9,100 OFFLINE | That’s cause you’re a little one. When you get big like Aaron you will sound like Michael.
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| 23 Jan 2007 12:47 am |
The drummer Rep: 18Joined: 20 Aug 2005 Posts: 14,615 OFFLINE | Online Predator wrote:
That’s cause you’re a little one. When you get big like Aaron you will sound like Michael.
...pulls out knife and slits throat
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| 23 Jan 2007 12:53 am |
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| 23 Jan 2007 12:53 am |
Damn you Thatcher, damn you tory bitch! Rep: 7Joined: 28 Oct 2006 Posts: 5,458 OFFLINE | meow
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| 23 Jan 2007 12:56 am |
The drummer Rep: 18Joined: 20 Aug 2005 Posts: 14,615 OFFLINE | Where’s the cat....grabs his rifle
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| 23 Jan 2007 05:06 am |
Happy to help Rep: 31Joined: 05 Jan 2007 Posts: 9,331 OFFLINE | Online Predator wrote:
tuscan1 wrote:
Chapter (1) THE FINDINGS.
“Spread the word my son, time is here, time for you and me to take hold of the moment” Jason gript his fathers hand as hard as he could “NOW!" his father shouted “NOW MY SON JUMP!" his father leened foward pulling at Jason’s arm almost ripping it out of it’s socket Jason didnt have the stragth to pull back “NO!" Jason shouted “I CANT DO IT!" his little legs where shaking with fear “YOU MUST! WE DONT HAVE MUCH TIME IT MUST BE NOW!" his father replied, the wind seem to take the words away from Jason “I CANT HEAR YOU!" Jason shouted back, his hands sweating and slowly losing his grip on his father “COME WITH ME JASON!" “I CANT I’M SORRY FATHER I JUST CANT!" his fathers hand slowly let go of his.
Stepping foward his father looked back “Ok then i must do this on my own” he wispered “FATHER NO!" Jason screamed but it was to late his father had gone Jason turned to the railings on the side of the old iron bridge his hands so cold from the howling wind he could hardly get a good hold of the rusty rail but some how he managed to pull himself up and over the top bar now on the solid concrete Jason could reflect on what had just happend his father was dead.
Tears rolled down his face each one holding a memorie of his father “no be brave” he wispered to himself, wipping away the tears and his thoughts for his father he new he had things to do people to find and qustions to be ansawed.
Nice.
Thankyou for your coment look out for ch2 its only a short story but i feel it has content.
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| 23 Jan 2007 04:12 pm |
The one and only OP Rep: 26Joined: 28 May 2006 Posts: 9,100 OFFLINE | tuscan1 wrote:
Online Predator wrote:
tuscan1 wrote:
Chapter (1) THE FINDINGS.
“Spread the word my son, time is here, time for you and me to take hold of the moment” Jason gript his fathers hand as hard as he could “NOW!" his father shouted “NOW MY SON JUMP!" his father leened foward pulling at Jason’s arm almost ripping it out of it’s socket Jason didnt have the stragth to pull back “NO!" Jason shouted “I CANT DO IT!" his little legs where shaking with fear “YOU MUST! WE DONT HAVE MUCH TIME IT MUST BE NOW!" his father replied, the wind seem to take the words away from Jason “I CANT HEAR YOU!" Jason shouted back, his hands sweating and slowly losing his grip on his father “COME WITH ME JASON!" “I CANT I’M SORRY FATHER I JUST CANT!" his fathers hand slowly let go of his.
Stepping foward his father looked back “Ok then i must do this on my own” he wispered “FATHER NO!" Jason screamed but it was to late his father had gone Jason turned to the railings on the side of the old iron bridge his hands so cold from the howling wind he could hardly get a good hold of the rusty rail but some how he managed to pull himself up and over the top bar now on the solid concrete Jason could reflect on what had just happend his father was dead.
Tears rolled down his face each one holding a memorie of his father “no be brave” he wispered to himself, wipping away the tears and his thoughts for his father he new he had things to do people to find and qustions to be ansawed.
Nice.
Thankyou for your coment look out for ch2 its only a short story but i feel it has content.
Yes, your story is off to a good start and seems to have potential with the whole mystery.
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