| 23 Jan 2007 05:03 pm |
The drummer Rep: 18  Joined: 20 Aug 2005 Posts: 14,614 OFFLINE | Yeah I liked it
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| 23 Jan 2007 05:31 pm |
Happy to help Rep: 31 Joined: 05 Jan 2007 Posts: 9,331 OFFLINE | Aaron McKay wrote:
Yeah I liked it
Thanks Aaron look for ch2 when it comes.
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| 23 Jan 2007 05:50 pm |
The drummer Rep: 18Joined: 20 Aug 2005 Posts: 14,614 OFFLINE | Ok I will
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| 24 Jan 2007 04:04 am |
Happy to help Rep: 31Joined: 05 Jan 2007 Posts: 9,331 OFFLINE | Is no one putting storys on this thread now ?............i want to read other peoples storys too.
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| 24 Jan 2007 08:52 am |
Happy to help Rep: 31Joined: 05 Jan 2007 Posts: 9,331 OFFLINE | Part (2) The findings
Jason started to contiplated the meaning of time as he walked along the road home, his hands still feeling the cold he slid them back into his jacket pockets “whats that” he asked himself as his hand could feel a small peace of paper in the corner of his left pocket, he pulled it out *04 88 76 04 22* the paper read “it’s a telephone number” Jason folded it back up and put it back in his pocket “Where did that come from ?" stopping near a street lamp he thought for a while “did father put it in my pocket without me knowing,and what dose it mean?" Jason thought about the last thing his father said to him “there’s something i should tell you Jason about what i know, time is irelivent time is only a mesurment which we use to justify a point in time when we are doing somthing i.e shopping one hour waiting for someone 20 minuits do you understand Jason this is very importent time is much bigger than that, much more complicated it is’nt as we see it, i found somthing that will show you what i mean, but i cant show you now it’s to big to carrie with me but meet me by the old bridge on Dennon way at 7:30pm tonight.“Jason wondered what his father was trying to say.
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| 24 Jan 2007 08:27 pm |
The drummer Rep: 18Joined: 20 Aug 2005 Posts: 14,614 OFFLINE | That was really good.. Give me next chapter! lol
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| 24 Jan 2007 10:04 pm |
Pastafarian Rep: 46 Joined: 13 Nov 2006 Posts: 13,019 OFFLINE | mr 1 2 i dont like you wrote:
about 13+ just the story of a soldier in ww2. this is chapter 1, im hoping to get 5 chapters.
Chapter 1: Charge of Stalingrad
My name is Alexander Tareg. i work as a watchmakers apprentice, hoping one day to open my own shop and have maybe get married and have kids, strt a life. But one thing squashed my dreams.World war two. Now i approach stalingrad about to lay down my life....
The boat was comiing in. we were reaching port.
the seargent shouted at us " welcome to Stalingrad. You are about to start the greatest moment of your life and maybe your last. Cowards and traitors will be shot! Do not count by days you survive, or miles, but by the number of Germans you kill! kill the Germans, this is your mothers prayer. Kill the German, this is the cry of your Russian earth! Death to the German!
" Death to the German! " we replied.
We had reached port. We got out of the boat and were each equipped with a rifle.It was time for action now.
" you! come with me!" shouted the seargent.
" me, sir?" I replied
" yes, you. Pay attention and follow my orders or i will shoot you myself."
I followed him then we took cover by a demolished building
" the machine guns are firing. Wait till they stop before moving."
He was right. If we moved now, bullets would fall at us like raindrops and wed be dead in a second. The machine guns had stopped firing now and me moved into an old warehouse.
The warehouse was swarmed by Nazis. We were fighting through it all. We reached the top. Then our 2 other men came up holding parts of a machine gun. They set it all together and one fired. Soon the gunman was shot and i was told to start shooting. I fired at the Nazis until I was shoved at the way. what the....? the seargent was dead in front of the machine gun. He must of seen a sniper that was gonna take a shot at me. But for a seargent to take his own life for a normal private..... i should have been the one that took my life for his. Then a dark figure came running up the stairs. I held my rifle tight in case it was a Nazi, but it was the commander....
" well, Im sorry for the loss of your seargent. But now you take orders from me. There is a warehouse where they have 3 machine guns firing. it is right opposite, do you see it? Our soliders cant get in so it is your job to find a way and get our soldiers in. Stalingrad can not afford to let the Nazis keep that warehouse. To show that we have conquered it, take down the nazi flag there. Now go!
I searched all around it, keeping out of sight from the machine guns. A back door! This is exactly what we needed. The soldiers charged through killing all the Nazis and i took down the flag. Stalingrad was safe. I was able to see all the Nazis retreat from stalingrad......
end of chapter one.
You copied that from call of duty!
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| 24 Jan 2007 10:05 pm |
Damn you Thatcher, damn you tory bitch! Rep: 7 Joined: 28 Oct 2006 Posts: 5,458 OFFLINE | all right but im doing a story version with 4 more chapters
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| 24 Jan 2007 10:18 pm |
Pastafarian Rep: 46Joined: 13 Nov 2006 Posts: 13,019 OFFLINE |  COPYRIGHT IM TELLING BJARNE!
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| 24 Jan 2007 10:21 pm |
Damn you Thatcher, damn you tory bitch! Rep: 7Joined: 28 Oct 2006 Posts: 5,458 OFFLINE | wait, im 3writing the storyu based on it!
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| 24 Jan 2007 10:31 pm |
Pastafarian Rep: 46Joined: 13 Nov 2006 Posts: 13,019 OFFLINE | I DONT CARE!!!!!!!!!!!
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| 25 Jan 2007 12:57 am |
King of the Gamer Army Rep: 33 Joined: 22 Nov 2005 Posts: 14,667 OFFLINE | Isn’t it fan fiction? As long as if he doesn’t profit from it and states it so.
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Did you hear me? I’m a bigger better pussy than you’ll ever be.
Wtf...
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| 25 Jan 2007 01:39 am |
Pastafarian Rep: 46Joined: 13 Nov 2006 Posts: 13,019 OFFLINE | He has published it into a book...
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| 25 Jan 2007 02:05 am |
Damn you Thatcher, damn you tory bitch! Rep: 7Joined: 28 Oct 2006 Posts: 5,458 OFFLINE | no i only wrote it on here
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| 25 Jan 2007 02:55 am |
Happy to help Rep: 31Joined: 05 Jan 2007 Posts: 9,331 OFFLINE | Aaron McKay wrote:
That was really good.. Give me next chapter! lol
thanks Aaron! ya will do soon ok.
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| 25 Jan 2007 03:42 am |
Happy to help Rep: 31Joined: 05 Jan 2007 Posts: 9,331 OFFLINE | Part (3) The findings
The wind seemed to gently push him on his way, still thinking about his father Jason was trying to put the peaces together “the peace of paper with the numbers, what his farther said " his thoughts drifted again “why would father want to kill himself and why did he want to kill me too..........OH MY GOD!...........was that what he wanted to show me death?" he shudderd at the thought “did my father have somthing wrong with him that he went mad” he put he hands to his face in shock “was it his work or home life did he have money troubles” Jason scratched his head in wonder “father was loaded and i never heard him and mother argue at all, it must be somthing at work!" and with that thought Jason started to look around him “A PHONE!" he shouted " a bluddy phone i need a bluddy phone” his hart sank when he relised there was no phone “god damb it” he mumbled to himself as he did so he looked up a small blueish light had apeared above his head the light seemed almost transparant, Jason starred at it, it shaked as if cold it couldnt have been more that two inches round he steped to one side to move away from it, still starring he streched his arm out to grabb it, the light moved as his hand got close but he could feel a slight warmth raideating from it.
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| 25 Jan 2007 09:45 am |
The drummer Rep: 18Joined: 20 Aug 2005 Posts: 14,614 OFFLINE | good good..
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| 25 Jan 2007 10:32 am |
Happy to help Rep: 31Joined: 05 Jan 2007 Posts: 9,331 OFFLINE | Aaron McKay wrote:
good good..
I’m glad your liking it Aaron.
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| 25 Jan 2007 10:35 am |
what? what? Rep: 29 Joined: 13 Jun 2006 Posts: 11,994 OFFLINE | tuscan1 wrote:
Aaron McKay wrote:
good good..
I’m glad your liking it Aaron.
ahem go see your pm’s
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| 25 Jan 2007 10:52 am |
Happy to help Rep: 31Joined: 05 Jan 2007 Posts: 9,331 OFFLINE | mimi38 wrote:
tuscan1 wrote:
Aaron McKay wrote:
good good..
I’m glad your liking it Aaron.
ahem go see your pm’s
Have done now check yours.
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